Throughout writing both drafts of Project 2, I think I made some big improvements throughout the writing process. One thing I did not change much of was my introduction. When meeting with Olivia, our writing follow, during Project 1, she really helped me to create stronger introductions. They not come easily to me. The main thing I changed in the introduction paragraph was my thesis. My thesis expanded into a stronger one as two sentences. Of course I made local changes throughout my writing, but I feel as if I do not have many good examples of them. I expanded my paragraphs greatly from the first to the last draft. For example, the second paragraph of my paper, about Scheuer’s three ideas of a liberal arts education, is double the length it had originally been. This is mainly because of my use of evidence from the readings. I also changed my paragraph about Ungar’s explanations of misconceptions of a liberal arts education. By doing this, I think I made my points stronger and more clear as well as being able to explain the misconceptions better. A paragraph I added to my last draft was the naysayer paragraph, or the “nae nae paragraph” as Professor Cripps had called it throughout the writing process. I was struggling writing this as I had never written a strong naysayer paragraph before. It comes in at the end of my paper, just before the conclusion.
