Introduction
Introductions have always been a little difficult for me. In my meeting with Olivia, she helped me to create a stronger introduction paragraph from my rough draft to my final. In our meeting, we combined part of my second paragraph with my original introduction paragraph. This helped to set up my paper and introduce the authors and texts used in the writing. Instead of just defining what the terms were, I did this but I also introduced everything that should be introduced in an introduction paragraph.
Evidence and Explanations
When I added to my paper, I generally added evidence to where my peers suggested I should. I think in working with the final draft, I explained or added more to my point of view. Adding more evidence, quotes, and explanations helps the reader to easily work through the reading and connect easier. Doing this also helps me, the author, to create a clear sense of my writing and my point of view.
Reorganization
Throughout writing my final draft, I separated multiple paragraphs because they were lengthy. After doing this, I then combined different sections of the paper. I can’t really remember the exact changes since this was a few weeks ago. I changed how I references the writings and used the authors names instead and I changed citations throughout the paper.
New Paragraphs
I added a conclusion to my final draft. Like introductions, conclusions are not that simple for me to work through. Olivia also helped me with this part of my paper. She helped me to organize my thoughts throughout the paper and create a strong conclusion to my paper, reiterating my key points. Besides that, I didn’t add new paragraphs, I just majorly reorganized them as I stated in the previous section.
