As I completed my first draft, my big concern was not having enough to write about. This topic is kind of broad and also hard to argue with, especially since UNE is a liberal arts school. My peers liked how I introduced and explained the concepts and themes discussed in the readings and how I used quotes to define and explain them. Meg thinks I can reorganize a few of my points to make my paper more clear. I am working best with Ungar when I am connecting his work of his misconceptions relating them to the UNE CAS Core Handbook and explaining both sides. I think I work best with the misconceptions and the quotes I have used to explain and relate them to the actual reality of them. I can improve by integrating the misconception more into my text. For Scheuer, I am working best with his conceptions and how those are integrated into the themes in the UNE CAS Handbook. For the Handbook, I find it easy to integrate it and its writing with the other two quotes. The handbook is a medium of the two writings can can support many topics I have discusses or even ones I haven’t. My two biggest challenges according to my peers are making my arguments stronger (Justin) and rewording some things to make my writing more clear (Meg). I can revise my paper and reorganize pieces to make it fit better as well as integrating my opinion into it more.
