For this revision, I mainly focused on what my peers told me may help to benefit my paper. My paragraphs definitely are still a work in progress and are a little long and may be better off split up. I did split Paragraph 1 into two, but there may still need to be some tweaking to that.
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For class, we have read multiple articles and watched a TED Talk discussing what a fixed mindset is versus what a growth mindset is. Both the speaker, Carol Dweck, and the authors who wrote “The Coddling of the American Mind,”(don’t forget to cite all quotes correctly) Greg Lukianoff and Jonathan Haidt, make points and give examples about a growth mindset and a fixed mindset. Dweck is a big advocate for spreading the concept of having a growth mindset. In her TED Talk, Dweck says that phrases like “I love a challenge” and “You know, I was hoping this would be informative,” are examples of what she calls a growth mindset. She believes when one changes their mindset and looks at different perspectives, it can change a lot about how a person acts and how they can succeed in life. Dweck encourages people to engage, process, learn, and correct their mistakes. Her ideas about a fixed mindset come into play when reading “The Coddling of the American Mind.” In this reading, Lukianoff and Haidt give examples of what Dweck calls a fixed mindset. Dweck says that these people “..run from the error. They don’t engage with it.” In “The Coddling of the American Mind,” the authors talk about the ‘solutions’ to the fixed mindset people. These ‘solutions’ include using trigger warnings, which may be helpful in some cases but can prove unhelpful in many. Many trigger warnings used recently are unnecessary, but are used due to the sensitivity of many closed-minded closed minded people, or people with a fixed mindset. The authors describe these people as trying to “…. scrub campuses clean of words, ideas, and subjects that might cause discomfort or give offense.” Many students and people in that generation now are very closed- minded to the real world issues around them, which is not a good thing. These two readings work very well together in my opinion because they show the differences with examples of both fixed and growth mindsets.
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For class, we have read multiple articles and watched a TED Talk discussing what a fixed mindset is versus what a growth mindset is. “The Coddling of the American Mind” explains the growing sensitivity in the current generational shifts, relating to a fixed mindset, and offers a few solutions throughout the article. Both the speaker, Carol Dweck, and the authors who wrote “The Coddling of the American Mind,” Greg Lukianoff and Jonathan Haidt, make points and give examples about a growth mindset and a fixed mindset. During her TED Talk, you can tell Dweck is a big advocate for spreading the concept of having a growth mindset since she gives examples of phrases like “I love a challenge” and “You know, I was hoping this would be informative.” She believes when one changes their mindset and looks at different perspectives, it can change a lot about how a person acts and how they can succeed in life. Dweck encourages people to engage, process, learn, and correct their mistakes.
Her ideas about a fixed mindset come into play when reading “The Coddling of the American Mind.” In this reading, Lukianoff and Haidt give examples of what Dweck calls a fixed mindset. Dweck says that these people “..run from the error. They don’t engage with it.” In “The Coddling of the American Mind,” the authors talk about the ‘solutions’ to the fixed mindset people. The problem with these people is that they are not open to new ideas or beliefs, and shut themselves out or are ‘oversensitive’ to some information. These ‘solutions’ include using trigger warnings, which may be helpful in some cases but can prove unhelpful in many. The use of trigger warnings is meant for people who have PTSD or have had other harmful events occur in their lives to prevent them from any further suffering. Many trigger warnings used recently are unnecessary, but are used due to the sensitivity of many closed minded people, or people with a fixed mindset. The authors of “The Coddling of the American Mind” describe these people as trying to “…scrub campuses clean of words, ideas, and subjects that might cause discomfort or give offense.” Many students and people in that generation now are very closed minded to the real world issues around them, which is not a good thing. These two readings work very well together in my opinion because they show the differences with examples of both fixed and growth mindsets.
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The readings and the TED Talk discussed in class also talk about how our society contributes to the current generations’ use of both mindsets and the things that come along with that. Trigger warnings were mentioned in the previous paragraph, but trigger warnings are not the only preventative measure being used to guard people with fixed mindsets from real- world issues. My favorite article we read was, “The Differences Between Coddling and Safe Spaces” by Michael S. Roth. He talks about the differences between keeping people safe and exposing people to live’slife’s hardships and real- world issues. The purpose of a safe space is to allow all students or people to feel welcome in the community in which they are in. The main problem with this is coddling. Many people and students in the current generation are over coddled and not exposed to things that they should be exposed to. For example, in “The Coddling of the American Mind,” a law student asked her professors not to teach rape law because of how it might be discomforting to her peers. Although rape is a very scary topic and may not be easy to talk about, it is a real issue and it does need to be talked about. Keeping large issues like this in the dark won’t do any good for anyone. People should be trying to bring horrible things like rape into awareness in order to educate young people and to try to prevent it. My favorite quote from Roth is: “Like families, campus cultures are different, but all should promote a basic sense of inclusion and respect that enables students to learn and grow – to be open to ideas and perspectives so that the differences they encounter are educational.” He shows his understanding of a basic sense of safety but also how students and young people need to be exposed to the things around them.
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“The Coddling of the American Mind,” “The Differences Between Coddling and Safe Spaces,” and the TED Talk discussed in class talk about how our society contributes to the current generations’ use of both mindsets and the effects that come along with that. Trigger warnings were mentioned in the previous paragraph, but trigger warnings are not the only preventative measure being used to guard people with fixed mindsets from real world issues. My favorite article we read was, “The Differences Between Coddling and Safe Spaces” by Michael S. Roth. He talks about the differences between keeping people safe and exposing people to live’s hardships and real world issues. The purpose of a safe space is to allow all students or people to feel welcome in the community in which they are in. The main problem with this is coddling. Many people and students in the current generation are over coddled and not exposed to things that they should be exposed to. For example, in “The Coddling of the American Mind,” a law student asked her professors not to teach rape law because of how it might be discomforting to her peers. Although rape is a very scary topic and may not be easy to talk about, it is a real issue and it does need to be talked about. Keeping large issues like this in the dark won’t do any good for anyone. In my opinion, sheltering young adults from the hardships that are part of life does not prepare them, but may harm them in the long run. If these ‘stressful’ topics are not talked about and are not being taught, it may cause more issues to rise. People should be trying to bring horrible things like rape into awareness in order to educate young people and to try to prevent it. My favorite quote from Roth is: “Like families, campus cultures are different, but all should promote a basic sense of inclusion and respect that enables students to learn and grow – to be open to ideas and perspectives so that the differences they encounter are educational.” He shows his understanding of a basic sense of safety but also how students and young people need to be exposed to the things around them.
